My memories

When I was in school, my friends and I took part in a drawing competition on the widuri beach. At that time there were many who took part in the competition there.after the competition was over I took a picture with the clown. A few days later my teacher said I got 1st place and got a box for ate. I was very happy to got it.

When I was in elementary school, I had many friends there. I had a friend, her was named Pelangi. But I regretted her when her left the school when her was in second grade. At that time I felt sad because I lost a friend. When I was in 3rd grade, I got a new friend. Her was named Mona. I was happy when friends with him.
so,that's my memories when i was child.

Komentar

  1. Sudah bagus, Mba. Tapi ada yang harus diperbaiki.
    i seharusnya I (saya selalu pakai huruf kapital)
    "But i regretted her when her left the school when her was in second grade".
    itu seharusnya "But I regretted her when She left the school. It was in second grade.

    BalasHapus
  2. kalau bisa diedit lagi dan ada jarak antara paragraph 1 dan seterusnya.

    BalasHapus
  3. Amazing lulu👍
    Very good your story👏

    BalasHapus
  4. good your story :v lulu

    BalasHapus
  5. Saya suka. Saya suka 😍😂

    BalasHapus

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